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Breath of Life

Author: BCute
ASL Info:    30/F/MO
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Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Don't even know. Just came to me.

Breath of Life

Brief interludes escape,
unable to fathom events,
unfurl blindingly,
releasing all hope,
in pitch-black despair.

Cries cannot aid,
whispers cannot carry,
simply cease to exist,
within misery,
aching miserably.

Whirlwinds capture hair,
tearing relentlessly,
stepping to the edge,
of an abyss,
too deep to ignore.

It hurts more,
digging deeper,
cognitive thinking ceases,
life gives no air,
to ease.

No breath of life.

Just a bandage to mask disrepair.

Submitted on 2009-07-09 15:38:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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