voices

Author: joezwells Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 64 /79 /55 Words: 112

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voices

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i know you can hear me you dont have a choice im fucking with your head and im taking your voice try and stop me ill make your life hell and dont try to scream no one can hear you yell........ this mental demond it wont shed a tear it has no mercy and it has no fear inflicking pain and it doesnt care forcing out lies i didnt want to share silenting killing its taken all i got normally i would lie without any thought but this damn thing thats controling my head it wont leak a lie the truth is all that is said

Submitted on 2009-07-09 23:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I'm not sure but I think this poem is about doing the right thing when all you here is this demond telling you not to care and not to fight. I think that it's with you all the time and it makes you want to scream when it attacks. I feel this way all the time. I'm not sure if thats what you meant but thats what it sounds like to me. I really liked this poem because it had so much feeling and so much depth for such a short poem. Good Job. Long time!

| Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]

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