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Author: joezwells
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Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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serously i been watching too many movies or something. toatlly not my style of writing but whatever.


i know you can hear me
you dont have a choice
im fucking with your head
and im taking your voice
try and stop me ill make your life hell
and dont try to scream no one can hear you yell........

this mental demond
it wont shed a tear
it has no mercy and it has no fear
inflicking pain and it doesnt care
forcing out lies i didnt want to share

silenting killing
its taken all i got
normally i would lie without any thought
but this damn thing thats controling my head
it wont leak a lie the truth is all that is said

Submitted on 2009-07-09 23:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm not sure but I think this poem is about doing the right thing when all you here is this demond telling you not to care and not to fight. I think that it's with you all the time and it makes you want to scream when it attacks. I feel this way all the time. I'm not sure if thats what you meant but thats what it sounds like to me. I really liked this poem because it had so much feeling and so much depth for such a short poem. Good Job. Long time!
| Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]

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