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Submission Name: Da Nile is Deep and Wide dots

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Author:	grey_girl
Elite Ratio:	6.51 - 451/344/81
Words:	147

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Da Nile is Deep and Wide dots

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We'll be everything but lovers,
write ten letters per day, mine confessions
to your questions, and yours evasions
of things I want to hear you say...
But still, we'll write our letters
and together we'll again run out of words
sitting in silence, stress and violence
in our outbursts in the evenings
when we meet online after the busy day...
I'll be your fuck-up, canvas to muck up
in some sharper-worded insult
gotta hurt me just to jerk me back
into the stark of white and black,
no grays... but you can't say
more than you missed me, never list me
as a lover or another who is real to you,
you say that you cant trust me,
but you must be feeling something
or you wouldn't act so stubborn,
but you won't tell me you love me...
so what's to say?

Submitted on 2009-07-10 00:26:36 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It sometimes sucks how the one we love the most is our chosen vestibule for our anger and frustration. Normally, it isn't your lover who is at fault and would rather see you smile at a baby, laugh in the theatre and purr upon embrace. Thankfully, we still sometimes share moments like those. But who better to lash out on than the one you DO trust and know would never hold it against you? That is what love is about. Not sex, not money, not even compatability. Its about being in the same place at just the right time. And then never wanting to leave.

I loved this write. It put a lot of things into perspective for me, especially since at this point in my life, things haven't particularly fallen into place. So thank you

-Shoes
| Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by iShoes | [ Reply to This ]
  Sometimes I think men and women are just too different to be together. We like a little bit of love every day, in an offered cup of tea, or breakfast in bed, or in an honest e-mail. Most men think a bunch of flowers, from the garage, once a year says enough of an 'I love you' to last the next 364 days. And that's if you're a lucky woman!

'I'll be your [censored]-up, canvas to muck up
in some sharper-worded insult
gotta hurt me just to jerk me back
into the stark of white and black,
no grays'

You know, I had this boyfriend who would wind me up until I was screeching like a banshee- the whole while he would remain super calm, like some demi-god watching his disciples riot- 'I'm much too big and important for this kind of thing'. I swear he did it because he liked me impassioned. Wanker.

Your poem made me think of those two things.

I like how you wrote this poem with wit and humour. It makes it so readable (and what we have to put up with from men so bearable). It's good to make light of a tough situation.

Aly
| Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I know as elitists, we're not supposed to say this, but I can relate. This is honestly really powerful and real and girl don't I know it. I like Jaydee's comment about the waterfall, that's an interesting analogy. But this was a good write too, written in both anger and desperation. Oh, how I understand and understand and empathize. But to answer Jaydee's question, it's not a fight so much as a wanting to work with and being forced out. Magnetic atraction where one is ether and the other is lead. Anyhow, thanks for this read. Good stuff.

Love.
| Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
  this reeks of MMMMMMM...

but its true you know. youre prolly the most interesting person his life has ever contained and if we knew which B he resided in he really would have to lock all his windows and doors haha!

but really... im wondering what this whole game is about. why do you keep going back to his unhelpful advice..? 7 years and what do you got to show for it..?

if it isnt love it will have to do [im pretty sure billy holiday sings that line]

its crazy how boys can ask girls questions and girls can give them horridly long crazy answers that contain more than half of their entire being only for the boy to answer with some pathetic, almost monosylabic grunt that is somehow their answer for the question as well as a response to your answer...

and you know what...?
when i was in ethiopia i went to the blue nile falls... not only is de nile wide and deep but it also falls and sprays and crashes like nothing you have EVER seen...

i dont even know why we bother to try fight it sometimes...
| Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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