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    dots Submission Name: my own personal helldots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 455
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 345



    Description:
       i sometimes freak out.
    i get easily frusterated.
    so this poem is about what i feel during these times.


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    dotsmy own personal helldots
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    blanked out.
    i have no sense left.
    i feel so lost.
    like i lost my bet.

    i cry at God.
    how could i feel so cold?
    so angry
    i've lost my control.

    my eyes are red.
    im losing it now.
    my own personal hell.
    my emotional breakdown.






    Submitted on 2009-07-10 13:14:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very emotional poem that represents the feelings of loss and anger when things aren't going the way somebody wants them to. It is said that most teenagers feel this way quite a lot. Well, in any case, this is a great poem and I look forward to reading plenty more like it. I would like to hear more about the reasons behind this particular poem, as it should be interesting. I hope that you're like me in that you write emotional poem without actually feeling those emotions or having any experience on the subject whatsoever.
    | Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]


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