Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Fall To Temptationdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: silverpen
    ASL Info:    16/F/Right Behind You
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 16/34/31
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 61
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 706



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFall To Temptationdots
    -------------------------------------------


    There is a simple kind of elation…
    That comes with the rise of temptation.
    To giving in to your darker side--
    Allowing impulse to control your mind.
    As human, we are allowed to fall.
    We can be allowed to give in to it all,
    As long as we retain the guilt…

    Like a predator, stalking it’s prey,
    So it will be killing again today.
    But override the guilt with a need to survive,
    And here you have a darker side.
    Collapsing under the weight of pure need,
    Is not quite allowing evil to plant a seed,
    But does it not remain close?
    Such a fine line that makes the time
    Between temptation, and falling.




    Submitted on 2009-07-10 15:41:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      A well named poem; struck right at the source and hit home hard. As human we sin, and as I read I realized you captured everything so vibrantly. The words were twisted into such a fine line, that it made perfect sense. Temptation is so heavy, and everything here screams that exactly. A good read is what this is.
    | Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by Lincesa | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    176361



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry