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    dots Submission Name: Running shortdots
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    Author: grimmreaper
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 122/43/23
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    Description:
       my bulimia. each bite, feels like swallowing a bullet. and every minete i wait tell i throw it all up kills me. because each seconed is a calorie going to my body.


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    dotsRunning shortdots
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    Each bite,
    Like led weights
    Tearing into my stomach

    Each minuet
    Like hours
    Ticking by,
    longer and longer
    As each second strikes

    I must release this pain
    crushing my insides
    and tearing and my thoughts

    Like a knife
    cutting into my heart

    I try to fight
    but as i pass the mirror,
    it speaks to me
    through deserving lies

    I want to be strong
    I try to hold it in
    but listening to the clock
    tick by
    over and over
    each moment
    the weight
    becomes heavier
    tell the pain
    becomes unbearable to feel
    any longer

    So as I slide my fingers
    down my throat
    I sight in relief
    The empty feeling
    once more
    over taking my body.

    I feel at peace
    But only for a momentís time
    Because than
    I see myself in the mirror
    one last time
    and i know
    that each time i do this.....

    My time is running short




    Submitted on 2009-07-10 21:22:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm It took me some time to get through this post simply because of all the misspelled words as well as some grammar mistakes but I enjoy this post very much I personally can relate to what you are speaking of here and I must admit it takes a lot of courage to write and post it on here for all to view and speak of it. I have a post on here i wrote a while ago I'll PM the title to you I think you'll enjoy it. Anyway I really suggest you fix all the mistakes on this I think more pple would be likely to comment, I still enjoyed don't get me wrong please don't take this as an insult just a simply suggestion..

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-25 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, sometimes I'd like to rush things along, and then I try to keep in mind the fact, time is going to handle it all anyway.

    Why hurt yourself, when you can always find someone else do it with far more precision and skill? And the world is full of them, all you have to do is open your soul and smile.

    | Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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