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    dots Submission Name: WHY??dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       We are no longer together... yet I love hearing from him... I love hearing that voice that once comforted me when times were tough. Although each time we talk its nothing but nasty arguments


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    Why do I always look forward to seeing your name appear on my phone?
    Why do I long to hear your voice?
    Why is it that you are the first to put a smile on my face,
    Yet anger always runs threw my veins each and every time we speak?

    You are truly my good, bad and ugly.

    I long to be with you
    I long to have you near when were are apart.
    Yet every time we talk its always my form of downers

    But I cannot bear to part ways with you.
    You have my heart and always will.

    So what am I to do?




    Submitted on 2009-07-11 22:13:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I sat here and I read and re read and re read because although it's short I had to stop each time, take a breath and try to wipe enough of the tears away that I could get through to the next few lines.

    I am here with you, my husband just left me to live with the woman behind where our kids and I are at now. And we've been together seventeen years, in a matter of months I am no longer anything good.

    To read his words to her that she has been the best thing that's come into his life in so long breaks my heart. I wanna scream at him

    WHY?You Promised you'd never leave me!!

    But he says if he were to stay with me he'd be miserable. I've been broken for seventeen years and he's tried to fix me but I need more help than he can give.

    So everyday when I see him my heart aches to be in his arms, and he'll hold me. kiss me, tell me he still loves me and always will. Then he'll check his phone answer a txt and we'll talk some more about this or that but in the end he always has to go. He spends his nights holding her. while sleep on the other side of the fence alone crying for him to hold me once again.

    So I feel your pain so much.,,,
    and I thank you for letting us read your heart once again

    always
    Heather
    | Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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