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    dots Submission Name: Alone Hungry Lostdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsAlone Hungry Lostdots
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    I am alone in this world
    Yet I am surrounded by others,

    I am hungry in this lonely world I live within
    Despite I am normally within an arms reach of food,

    I am lost by all my loneliness and hunger
    Spite of having such a basic and set schedule,

    Why am I having such difficulty here?
    Why do I not just let my wall come down,
    accepting help from those whom are willing?

    I put this mask on day in and day out,
    I paint this face all up
    Including the fake smile and happy expressions

    This has become my way of life
    "Rule Of Thumb"
    Allow NO ONE, Accept NO attempts

    However... I am

    Alone,
    Hungry,
    Lost,

    Within a world I should not be.




    Submitted on 2009-07-11 22:42:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This may sound stupid to you but what your going through I go through everyday. You feel so alone yet people surround you and you still feel so alone. Those feelings you feel are felt because you feel like no one understands you and they look at you and think your beautiful and great and you have so much to offer, but you on the other hand feel something so much more powerful and they just don't understand and you feel that they never will. I fight everyday with these feelings of loneliness and no caring even though they do I am so sorry that you feel this way because it is sometimes unbearable. I believe that when you release that pain that no one understands you will begin to understand why you feel the way that you do. They may not understand yet but they will begin to once you face your own demonds, your own heartache, facing that thing that traps you in your shell and doesn't want to let you out. Fight it and don't stop, no matter how many times you get knocked down, get back up and fight because you are worth it even if everyone tells you that all the time.
    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]
      You should be, you are and that is ok,

    I am glad that I started comming back to this site. I hadn't for a while ;...
    but.....
    something made me feel I needed to....


    and I think it was to read your heart and to be there for someone who paints a lot of the same pictures I do. Maybe it was a longing for some one to understand the pictures I paint as well.

    Please do not give up especially on yourself.

    Heather
    | Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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