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    dots Submission Name: thoughtlessdots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsthoughtlessdots
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    disappointment drawns all logic
    fighting to get your point across
    you totallly screwed me
    and you didnt give it thought

    you did what you thought you needed to
    when i all you really needed to do was ask
    but you became consumed
    and your honesty became masked

    dissapointment drawns all logic
    you took what i had
    and you didnt give it a thought
    all you had to do was ask
    but now its done
    and you cant count on me
    i can no longer be that one




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