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Author: joezwells
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Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Betrayal
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disappointment drawns all logic
fighting to get your point across
you totallly screwed me
and you didnt give it thought

you did what you thought you needed to
when i all you really needed to do was ask
but you became consumed
and your honesty became masked

dissapointment drawns all logic
you took what i had
and you didnt give it a thought
all you had to do was ask
but now its done
and you cant count on me
i can no longer be that one

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