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    dots Submission Name: dark needsdots
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    Author: ShadowGaze
    Elite Ratio:    0.87 - 27/15/27
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       ya...morbid i know.


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    dotsdark needsdots
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    my dark needs control,
    overpower,
    and intrude upon,
    all else.
    the nasty wants,
    outrule,
    the biggest needs.
    temptation,
    stomp out,
    obedience.
    my life,
    a twisted,
    messed up,
    ball of crime.
    lots ruined,
    nothing can fix it.
    the only way to solve the problem;
    end it,
    end it now,
    and end it quick,
    before you lose your chance.
    yet another dark need.




    Submitted on 2009-07-12 15:23:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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