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    dots Submission Name: himdots

    Author: ShadowGaze
    Elite Ratio:    0.87 - 27/15/27
    Words: 51
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    when he calls me,
    i get butterflies.
    when we talk,
    words jumble up in my head.
    when he says something sweet,
    my heart sores.
    him...thats all i can think about,
    this poem would of just had his name but i controlled my thoughts of him.
    hes the one,
    im sure.

    Submitted on 2009-07-12 20:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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