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    dots Submission Name: cuttingdots
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    Author: ShadowGaze
    Elite Ratio:    0.92 - 26/14/26
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 126
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 385



    Description:
       i cant relate much but it just came to my mind.


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    dotscuttingdots
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    pain,
    misery,
    anger,
    longing,
    stop it all.
    passion,
    grief,
    tears,
    broken heart,
    stop it all.
    a single blade,
    a single wrist,
    a singly vein,
    a single swipe,
    cutting will do the trick.
    innocent love,
    innocent boy,
    innocent girl,
    a single, innocent life.




    Submitted on 2009-07-12 21:09:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think you did a great job on this.... the use of words in the beginning... like the feelings... it really helps me to relate. I have no negatives.. good job man.
    | Posted on 2009-08-06 00:00:00 | by NautAnton | [ Reply to This ]
      pain,
    misery,
    anger,
    longing,
    stop it all.
    passion,
    grief,
    tears,
    broken heart,
    stop it all.
    a single blade,
    a single wrist,
    a singly vein,
    a single swipe,
    cutting will do the trick.
    innocent love,
    innocent boy,
    innocent girl,
    a single, innocent life.

    Okay, im gonna give you a critque. first of all [pain,
    misery,
    anger,
    longing,
    stop it all.
    passion,
    grief,
    tears,]

    Woah, to many one words, you gotta give more... feeling not just words. second. [a singly vein,] what?!? but anyway, I think you have talent. Keep writing and try to add more that just one word at a time.

    <3 Ashley
    | Posted on 2009-07-21 00:00:00 | by IleriahMarie | [ Reply to This ]



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