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    dots Submission Name: Conscious Draindots
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    Author: Mister Fizzle
    ASL Info:    32/M/Hell in a Handbasket
    Elite Ratio:    5.41 - 751/760/175
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 59
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsConscious Draindots
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    Well now…
    Obviously…
    this is all about the striking of matches
    and the burning of houses.
    The energy in your belly
    and the heat of ruinous fires.

    Nasty piece of work.

    I speak of assassins and demons, man.
    Not ghosts in your kitchen
    rattling the dishes.

    This is about the breaking of damns
    and the flooding that follows
    The glee tickling your heart
    and the warm sensation at the back of your skull.

    Can I get an Amen, brother?
    Can I get a hallelujah?

    My lungs breath deep and I know that I am sick with it.
    Wallowing so completely
    at the bottom of the mountain
    in the fall of my conscious
    and the petrification of my heart.

    I care not.




    Submitted on 2009-07-12 22:28:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I took this as revenge or payback, in a slant, and I think it's well-written. I am a case study of Anger Management Issues, I suppose, but I related well to the "ruinous fires" that burn wild and damage, and that mentally orgasmic release of physical destruction. ... the heat in the back of your skull...
    I like your writing style because it's straight-forward, understandable, and well-stated. I like the ending as well, the summation of the feeling to apathy. Overall, great piece, I enjoyed the read.
    | Posted on 2009-07-13 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]



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