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Good-Bye My Love

Author: trynfinity
ASL Info:    38/f/California
Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149 /145 /91
Words: 90
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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Good-bye my love forever
good-bye to your touch.

Good-Bye My Love

Good-bye my love forever
good-bye to your touch.
Good-bye to all you gave me
you'll never know how much.
Good-bye my love forever
you are the keeper of my soul.
I know you tried to stay here
to find a reason you shouldn't go.
Good-bye my love forever
I didn't mean to let you down.
I believed that you loved me
until forever came around.
Good-bye my love forever
don't look back I'll be ok.
I wish you love and laughter
to erase for you your pain.

Submitted on 2009-07-12 22:45:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's a little simplistic as far as poetry goes, but keep at it. I reckon you probably have some strong emotions invested here, perhaps the vent has done you some good. I think you could improve if you probed a little deeper though.

| Posted on 2009-07-13 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
  seems mad, and yet sad at the same time. I like that is short and to the point that gives it bit of a kick to it. Goodbye... its strong word, its much easier said than done. Although I'm sure you know that

| Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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