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    dots Submission Name: Deathdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       I wish I had died...


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    dotsDeathdots
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    I am left lying on this old carpet
    bleeding everywhere

    The bullets still lodged from within

    I have nothing left,
    What little that was there,
    Is no longer with me!

    My will power is drained,
    the bottom I have reached,
    not even drops remain.

    I lye here,
    where I hope I bleed to death

    Waiting... hoping... even praying
    Death will come soon.

    At this point I could see

    Heavens Gates
    OR
    Satins Chamber

    Wouldn't care as long as I am gone,
    AWAY from those who leave me crying, hurt and abused.

    Taken advantage in every way
    I am DONE
    This is my way of telling them ALL




    Submitted on 2009-07-12 23:55:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      But by being done, you caused yourself such pain, still you rose above like a pheonix from the ashes, in small steps you are taking back you,

    Please do not give up on that you are worth it,


    trynfinity
    | Posted on 2009-07-13 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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