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    dots Submission Name: Bitterdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsBitterdots
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    Like a kicked dog,
    in the cornor of your mind.
    Oh, how the venom leaves it's sting,
    Bloodshot and red-rimmed, my eyes.

    Baby Sister, how could you,
    twist your daggar in?
    Such a bitter wine,
    Poured in all my sores.

    If you truly want in my life,
    then why do you cut me so deep?
    I so want to be there for you,
    But, I watch wearily your kicking feet.




    Submitted on 2009-07-13 01:51:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      what?
    what did i do my sweet carebear?
    tell me and i'll kick my own butt!
    i will!
    what did i do wrong...
    what!
    i love you carebear!
    your:poprox:)
    | Posted on 2009-07-13 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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