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    dots Submission Name: You Were Theredots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Fanfic/I hate you
    Total Views: 623
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       This is about the irony of my Mother always being there in my life more so than ANYONE else and yet she is also the one whom subjected me to SOO much pain,betrayal, and hurt


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    dotsYou Were Theredots
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    During my darkest hour
    You where there
    During my weakest point
    You were there
    During those months I endured so much pain
    You still remained there for me
    Over all
    You've always been there
    How ironic...
    You were the one causing all this pain
    You were the one bringing me to my darkest hour
    You were the one causing all that pain I endured over those several months
    And because the dice have fallen this way
    And because the irony to all this
    That you are not only the pain doer' but also the pain take awayíer
    I cannot stand you...
    I cannot bear to be seen with you...
    I've lived through some hard times
    I've done the best I can
    But you my friend,
    My enemy...my
    My Mother
    You, have officially out-done yourself
    Itís this pain I feel daily
    That is a reminder to your past chores you placed upon me
    Itís this pain I have mention that weights me down a significant amount
    Ultimately this was the flame to the touch you had me await with
    I've changed and itís because of you
    This pain, these undesirable feelings
    Have brought me to where I am
    And you Ma'am, deserve all the credit...
    By the way... Itís nothing to brag about!!




    Submitted on 2009-07-13 01:56:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sorry that you had to endure what no child should, and that the one who should have protected you from all that did not.

    Every child should feel loved special one of a kind protected and believed in by their parents, that's a parents job it's in the secret manual we all get before we get to get the kid,.

    Some just don't understand that it's fundamental to follow through on these things , for that child to be emotionally mentally and sometimes physically healthy in return.

    You were stripped of too much of those fundamentals and you pay for it now as an adult, but you are starting to find your way through the pain and the fog, and I believe in you and believe you can do it,'

    Take care
    Heather
    | Posted on 2009-07-13 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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