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    dots Submission Name: Moving On.dots

    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Oh has it been a while ES. I miss thee so.

    rough draft for a write I'm working on!

    Basic love poem, longing to be with someone 2000 miles away sucks. let me tell you.

    Just your thoughts please.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMoving On.dots

    Is it so weird to think,
    That I love you too?
    Is it so weird to think,
    That I'll hold you through,

    the good times and the bad,
    when you're happy, when you're mad,
    is it so weird to think,
    That I love you too?

    Because I'd give up all I have
    Just to wake to you
    Family and friends
    my future too.

    Which is my daring leap
    If I dare say.
    Throw it all in a heap
    and just leave someday.

    So when you say you love me,
    I'll smile and say,
    Is it weird of me to see
    you in this way?

    Submitted on 2009-07-14 00:51:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      And I wish I could learn to type. *string
    | Posted on 2009-07-15 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel so, worth it when you write things like this, even though normally I feel like it's not true.
    I love the way you strong words together. It flows like it's a conversation.
    The only thing, in some of the stanzas it seems that to make them balance with the others, you have to erad the last two lines together, but then that means you're missing a line.
    Get what I'm saying?
    Love you Kyle.
    | Posted on 2009-07-15 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      Ain't weird at all. Sounds like you love her and understand what that love means it you both want it. Seems not weird at all but real. I really like the stanza about giving up all you have to be with her.
    | Posted on 2009-07-14 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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