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    dots Submission Name: Unforgivabledots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 355
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsUnforgivabledots
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    Unforgivable


    There was nothing I could do
    Except swallow the guilty mouthful
    Taken from their bowl of rice
    And chew upon the gristle
    Of my add hot water pot noodle

    Couldn’t stop the ice clinking
    In the glass of my extra chilled white wine
    Couldn’t stop me eating
    In my clinging to my life

    No I couldn’t stop their hunger
    Or wipe away their tears
    As they picked and ate the peeling paint
    From the sides of oil drums

    No way to stop the sun
    From drying to brittle leaves
    No way to halt the madness
    Of other peoples greed

    Nothing I could do but quench my thirst
    And dine with the ugly flies
    Clinging around the brown babies eyes

    Nothing I could do
    But feel my muscles work
    Feel the nourishment of bone
    While they live as human skeletons

    All I could do was sit there
    And apologise for the world
    All I could do was sit there
    And respectfully eat my meal
    Adding too much salt so it mingled with my tears
    Adding too much mustard
    So the food went burning down my throat

    I could do nothing else
    Except apologise for myself
    Sorry for being born in my wealthy world
    Sorry for my country
    For not rushing to your need
    Sorry for my government
    My vote helped to bring them in


    Sorry for the United Nations
    Who’s squabbling leaves you starving
    Sorry they did not stop the war
    That turned you into refugees

    And all the weeping mothers
    Their desperation in their eyes
    Their children no more than rag dolls
    Limply hanging from their arms
    Their little bloated bodies
    Going to join the others on lime dusted piles

    All I could do was sit there
    And apologise for the world
    All I could do was sit there
    And say sorry for myself
    Sorry for being born in my wealthy world
    Each and every mouthful
    Was swallowed with a choke
    But all I could do was sit there
    And respectfully eat my meal









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