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    dots Submission Name: The Life of a Bulletdots

    Author: col13x
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    dotsThe Life of a Bulletdots

    The Life of a Bullet

    It is a slumbering coffin
    There comfortably nestled in its darkest chamber
    Dreaming of trigger happy
    Reeking of gunpowder

    All its intent to hammer and burnt projectile
    Its song
    A screeched whistle of
    Real smoke lung
    Barrelled out to flight

    Its song
    A wailing calamity
    Of broken sound barriers
    Until reaching the sickening

    THUCK !

    Of its crescendo

    The life of a bullet

    Charges bolt
    Crack demon of blood
    Flesh to devour by velocity
    The life target
    Life ended

    Eats its way all the way to the grave
    And beyond
    Its heart of cold deliverance to death
    For a moment in heat
    Dreaming of trigger happy

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