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    dots Submission Name: Midnight Emaildots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Midnight Email


    Night burns both ends of the candle
    Full bent upon those wilderness horses
    Tearing in their stampede chains

    As this scarlet sangria swallows its taste of regret
    Heated on the words
    Caught between my heart and throat
    When the larynx wish for love
    Do they cough their silence
    With too many cigarettes

    I love you too much to crumble
    At the pillars of my salt
    Or to deny the impossible
    And hasten to the ruin of my blood

    Midnight then fails to impart
    The cold sweat of loss
    By thirty degrees tossed unsleeping
    On a burning bed of want
    And never quench my thirst

    Isis, oh Isis, cry to the prow of stars
    And lay a blessed hand
    Upon a troubled brow
    Turn calico fortune to a thread of silk
    Weaved into the tapestry of her heart

    I hear the stampede
    Tearing horses wild at their chains
    Full burning on both the candles ends













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      I get the feeling for the desire in your much vivid imagery. I particularly like the stanza including On a burning bed of want (particularly that line). Turning calico to silk thread for weaving in her heart is also excellent.
    | Posted on 2009-07-14 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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