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That other woman

Author: giver_of_death
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Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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This kinda started out with the first couple lines, and then instead of doing my homework in class, I evolved it and it turned into this. It's my first write in WAYYY too long so do what you can to make this better =]

That other woman

I like your kisses;

You taste like
Smoke, Vodka and Beer
I feel
Rebellious, dangerous and fear
They’re so
Strong, so wet, full of passion
I want style
And you’re the latest fashion

I like your touches;

They send
Shivers, goose bumps down my spine
And I can’t help
Wishing that you were all mine
It tingles
Down my arm, up my leg
Make me
Crave, make me want, make me beg

I like your sounds;

You like how I taste. I’m
Finer than
Ice cream, sugar, chocolate cake
The moans
Please deliver. I can’t wait
Sense desire
Move your hand down my waist

I like your words;

No, Please
Don’t stop now, I want more
Keep going
‘Till my lips are sore
But babe,
What about your girlfriend
Who cares?
I want you, my heroin.

Submitted on 2009-07-15 10:22:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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