Description: Ok just so you know this is my first try at making a poem so bear with me, I am learning. I will except any crtiques that you all will have, for it will help me better myself.
Thanks.
My Life's rule -------------------------------------------
Nice. Just one thing, and don't worry, this is just me...
Actually, maybe more then one thing.
Short. Vague. The Usage of one word.
The third thing is just me. Try to use different words, and spread them, so if you use it again it doesn't seem like you only know that one word to express that one emotion/thing etc.
It is rather short, but a lot of poems are short. But with short poems it has to hit you, quickly, giving you not much break. This doesn't mean it has to be happy, no, but in not much words you must give the reader something to work in, something that will make them read the poem over and over again to check if they got it all in, even though it is short.
Then vague. You get what you are trying to say, but is that all? You can add more to it, to try and get the reader to understand more about what you are trying to say, or try and find a powerful word that not only impresses the minds of the reader but also expresses that you know very well about what you are writing.
Submission Name: My Life's rule
