Description: "This world of fact we love, is unsubstantial stuff" is a line from W.H. Auden's The Sea and The Mirror, a book of prose based around Shakespeare's The Tempest.
this world of fact we love, is unsubstantial stuff -------------------------------------------
The false reality and ego hold while your bones are cracking and breaking under the crushing pressure of a world set to reject you.
Permanence, you dreamed and believed you would find is nothing but a smoke and mirror trick,
You realize your nakedness and the shame burning hot in cheeks...
You cry.
Was a lover a promise?
Was the world whispers on pillows and warm flesh in sheets?
The answers are vague and the philosophical depths are terrifying- which makes them all the more alluring and beautiful.
When did science become abandoned and rationality become absurd?
All you knew seems to be forgotten, as it should be, and you are left with the unsubstantial stuff.
I think this piece has a great idea, and it was worded very well, but it seemed a little short. I think it could have more layers built up to give it more body. I especially liked the lines...
"You realize your nakedness and the shame burning hot in cheeks...
You cry.
Was a lover a promise?
Was the world whispers on pillows and warm flesh in sheets?"
but I would also have to say keep it up, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Wow this is really good. Lots of strong lines, especially at the beginning. I do think you might want to cnintue this. It sort of winds down into more conventionality at the end, but you have such a strong beginning I think you should keep working at making this end stronger.
Submission Name: this world of fact we love, is unsubstantial stuff
