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    dots Submission Name: Ease Withindots
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    Author: Belle De Jour
    ASL Info:    24/Female/Inside
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 335/367/53
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       In order to find happiness we must release the past...


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    dotsEase Withindots
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    We have only begun
    Traveling through this storm
    A fire between us
    Begins to descend to dust
    Fearing the worst, weighing down
    Trapped within ourselves
    Unable to escape fears, which we create
    Inside
    Locked we remain, scared of our past lives

    I feel you hesitate still weary of all this
    We keep fighting
    To put old wounds to rest
    I am aching for you, suffocating
    Your breath, the passion in your eyes
    Wanting you and needing you
    Dive in, allow yourself to love me




    Submitted on 2004-07-18 14:43:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem captures perfectly the feelings of indecisive confusion that people struggle with from moment to moment. It's like you take this simple thing you know and then you start reading between the lines and giving yourself all these options and pretty soon you don't know what the hell to do and you have know idea what the hell happened. The weird thing is its mostly in your brain. I mean the simple thing is still there it's just been cluttered with this stuff people created. weird life. awesome poem belle
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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