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    dots Submission Name: Hidden Awaydots

    Author: bleeding-soul
    ASL Info:    17/m/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 94/94/14
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
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       Pretty intense.

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    dotsHidden Awaydots

    Hidden away, goes the pain another day
    Lifeless and timeless, my soul is slipping astray
    The immense feeling on drugs, my mind is at stake
    Ruthless and evil, but yet I feel so great.

    The power, the game, I'm riveting insane
    The brink of destruction, master the lions mane
    Pop one, pop two, again hidden away
    All these drugs, just to keep the demons at bay

    Hidden away, surrounding me always
    On the edge of destruction, no time to be brave
    Up all night, smoking this dank, no time for this now
    I'm hidden away.


    Submitted on 2009-07-17 11:00:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with you, sweetie... but i didn't write this one. alex wrote this one. any poems that are signed "Huntsvillian"...which is only one or two... are those of Alex's creation. i sent him your comment and he appreciates the feedback. much love. xoxo
    | Posted on 2012-01-13 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      The battle is so intense in the beginning, spoken of with passion. An introduction like that allows the reader to now that this piece is serious, this piece has something to say, the intent is very mysterious, leaving me wondering, what's next.

    And I love how you take note of your atmospher contributing to circumstance, I think it is a very truthful observation, and I think that you hit the nail on the head with your direct calling out,

    and then in the end, bitterly discarding it all.

    Ha ha, what else can be done.
    Thanks for sharing hunny,
    | Posted on 2011-11-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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