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In the Pursuit of Peace,

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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it's quite odd,

i wrote this in my dream,

and woke up,

and wrote it again

In the Pursuit of Peace,

My dreams are dreaming their own dreams,
I feel your blood pump through mine,
The echoing of such a distant beat
Haunts through my mind,
Hold my love close to you,
while we entangle and entwine,
Let what needs to be said be said,
but don't shatter our dreams because of the grapevine

Let my love shine through
on this dark December,
I couldn't picture any better weather,
I'll let you stand there, and take the shelter,
Your touch sends chills down my spine,
i still can't believe what I've left behind,
don't be swallowed into the depths of time,
restore you vision,
and let their be light.

i tend to see, more than i believe,
but this is something.
that escapes my judging,
what's in your crying eyes,
is more than anyone can deny,
it's a lifetime of hurt,
a lifetime of lies,
if you believe in this tonight
then my love.
we should be making this right-
I give into the world to much,
but for this i will fight.
Fight for an eternity,
from my sleepless daze.
for from this dream,
i shall not wake

I kneel to you,
and beg and plead
Shed what was,
and let it be what is to be
This past and present
Is a mere conduit.
let there be forgiveness
I beg you,
Let my head hang,
with those who were slayn
for i will not wake from where i wander.

it's such a vicarious thrill,
off a small sleeping pill.

Submitted on 2009-07-17 20:02:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There's so much content in this. I read it over and over for 20 minutes. This may be the most complex poem I've read from you...idk maybe I'm just tired. But I get so much from this.

The words: "I still can’t believe what I’ve left behind" made me wish I had written that. I can say that about most of your poems: I wish I had written that. "But wishes don't come true."- You

In the pursuit of peace, the title is demanding, and then it starts off with saying: “My dreams are dreaming their own dreams.” Its capturing. And also in the poem you often use the word “let”, like in order to achieve happiness you must “let” things be, you must accept and let go. You say so much by this. This is also a work of profound philosophy as it is some of your most engaging work. You’ve inspired me.

| Posted on 2009-07-18 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]

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