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    dots Submission Name: New York, New Yorkdots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       So one day I hope to move to NYC or the outlying areas.

    Just like always, its a roughdraft.


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    dotsNew York, New Yorkdots
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    I'm moving, I'm moving
    So very far away
    New York, New York
    My home someday

    So I'll play it like the movies
    And fly out the door
    hop on that train
    to live once more

    To get my restart
    To live on my own
    Closer to you and
    I won't feel alone

    I'm moving, I'm moving
    So Far Far away
    New York, New York
    Is where I'll stay

    Believe in the sunsets
    Live in the future
    Fulfill my dreams
    Find that suture

    And I'll make it up
    send my regards
    but please don't cry
    just read the cards

    I'm moving, I'm moving
    please don't fray
    New York, New York
    I won't stay.




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      I always felt that city was alluring, could draw many in so easily, wanting to be there.Or many never wanting to leave.

    I guess I myself can say I'd love to go there someday as well, on an important life's mission.

    Your almost saying hello to urban living in the worlds capital but not wanting to really say goodbye to loved ones on the way there.
    I see the drive to be independent in it though, which is admirable.

    For such a crowded place it holds the glass having dreams for many, many people all over.

    New York the city makes a great inspiration tool to write about, especially for the people who live there.

    I hope you enjoy living abroad and may you get there.
    | Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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