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    dots Submission Name: not alonedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsnot alonedots
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    the pain goes deep into my guts
    where you left that unborn thing
    and it wouldnt hurt so much
    if it could already sing
    but it cant cuz its not here yet
    and it wont
    cuz i wont let it
    not without you
    not without us
    you broke my heart
    before you broke my trust
    and im raw
    im so raw inside
    its not dead yet
    but this thing wont hide
    i was so yours
    these words will haunt me
    and i wont sleep
    cuz these dreams wont let me be
    and you will always be the murderer
    cuz im not taking the blame for you leaving
    i will admit that i am too weak alone
    you leave me bleeding
    out of every hole in my body
    except my vagina
    where i expect it to be bloody
    im gonna do it cuz it feels right
    you probably thought id do it anyway
    i gave you everything
    and now you throw me away




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