We’ve broken through each others atmospheres.
Feeling everything
Filling everything
Can we under stand
This skin we are carrying around our hearts
No different than
Yesterdays
tomorrows
Doubts
I cant keep doing this
Packaging my thoughts in containers
Sealing my fate
Depleting
And I’m thinking I shouldn’t
But I will
In your atmosphere
I haven’t taken a breath…
Of you in so long
Our experiences
Have rewound
Repeated
An instant in which I loved you
Flashes through my mind
The thought of your touch
Disturbs me
My soul cringes
Hiding within the crevice of my heart
As I lie next to you at night…
I love this, I feel theres alot here and that it just needs to be spaced out and tweaked a little bit. So I figured I would give it a go.
"We’ve broken through each others atmospheres.
Feeling,
Filling,
everything
Can we under stand
That the skin surounding our hearts
No different than
Yesterdays
or
tomorrows
Doubts
Cant keep doing this
Packaging thoughts in containers
Sealing my fate
Depleting
And thinking I shouldn’t
But I will
In your atmosphere
Haven’t taken a breath…
Of you in so long
Our experiences
Have rewound
and
Repeated
An instant in which I loved you
Flashes through my mind
The thought of your touch disturbs
and my soul cringes
Hiding within the crevice of my heart
As I lie next to you at night
Haven’t taken a breath…
Of you in so long
Our experiences
Have rewound
and
Repeated..."
Is everything ok beautifll? I hope you don't mind me playing around with this, but you know your writing always get me poetically aroused!
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