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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 365
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    been drinkin'since noon
    wonderin' how soon 'til i break
    said i never give, just take
    but i'd give myself to you
    i don't know if i'll make it through the night
    i guess it's all right

    haven't seen that face
    in a familiar place for too long
    this is all wrong

    so i wrote you this song
    it's tough to be strong with half a heart
    and oceans keep us apart
    why can't we start
    Over, over, I don't want this to die
    Crimson and clover, give it one more try
    If I said i'm fine thats a fucking lie
    look me in the eye and tell me
    "I don't love you anymore"

    It's not like it was before
    you stepped out of my life
    razor sharp knife cut my soul
    i'm no longer whole
    gived back the heart that you stole

    so i wrote you this song
    and i'm trying to be strong
    but i'm the tin man
    and you're my oil can
    when I say i'm doing better
    it means i'm worse
    but I can't rewind it
    or take back all the shit i said

    replay that moment in my head
    again, again, just once more
    you walked out the door, but left it open
    I haven't closed it

    I'm still hopin' you can hear this
    'cuz I miss your smile, the way you smell
    we had heaven, now i'm in hell
    From bliss to burning in a night
    just give me one more fight
    another moment with you close for me to hold
    I told you you're my angel
    now i'm forsaken

    and now what's left of my heart is still breakin'
    it's been taken by your lips
    just beyond my fingers
    It's been two months
    but your taste still lingers

    this is a song about you
    can't be strong without you
    come back, come back
    i'm painted black
    why can't we start over, over
    start over, and make it right
    when you left, you took the light
    stuck in the black
    with no way back

    God what did I do?
    I hope you know how much I miss you




    Submitted on 2009-07-19 13:08:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Angels can be horrible creatures, wreaking havoc and justice when we need it the least, when we just want to hold onto their wings and keep our feet off the ground a little while....

    Never give your heart to an Angel... they'll just crush it when they drop it and fly away.
    | Posted on 2009-07-19 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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