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    dots Submission Name: cannonsdots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 640
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    Bytes: 496



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    I can taste the end, I can feel it in the air,
    I can see the people crying,
    But I really dont think I care,
    I can hear the cannons, And the marching feet across the sands,
    I embrace the dawn,
    of mans final stand.

    I can hear the trumpets, and now so can you,
    the air carries death, the skies no longer blue.
    I feel no empathy for mankind,
    we made ou own beds,
    ignoring all our history,
    mankind will soon be dead.




    Submitted on 2009-07-19 22:57:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Uh where to start. Personally I found that this piece could have been alittle longer. I understood the meaning behind it, but I think you could have done better in placing an image for readers. But all in all I think it was pretty cool. Good Job!!
    | Posted on 2009-07-21 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]


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