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    dots Submission Name: It's Unsettling.dots
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    Author: Areinaka
    ASL Info:    20, F, Oregon, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 130/114/29
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 412
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1646



    Description:
       I don't know. I really don't know what to do.


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    dotsIt's Unsettling.dots
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    Why must it be so chaotic, so distracting.
    So unreal. This life. This defiance.
    Atrophied brain cells. Hits you like a brick.
    Unsure of what to do next.
    So much confusion. Thoughts tumbling through your head.
    Destruction. This magnificence brought down.
    Demise. Unhappiness. Why must it always be this way.
    So surreal. Unreal. Defies logic. Defies reality. Defies everything you knew.
    This hate, this love. These destructive tendencies.
    It's all chaos now. What have you done?
    Fate's curse through ecstasy.
    Yet again.
    Why does it have to be this way?!
    Untold stories of millions. Untold tributes to those you care for.
    A seeing eye in the darkness. Blind to all but one.
    Maybe two. There's so much to do, no time.
    Spinning out of control. Sprialing down again.
    Down to the deepest depths where strange creatures roam, and oddities float in the sky.
    Waiting, suspense, wringing my heart dry, waiting for you.
    Is it worth it?
    Is it worth the trial, the pain, the suffering, the unknown?
    What has been done to the heart? What has happened to the mind?
    So disappointed. Kills me inside.
    Rage towards everything. Trust cannot be found.
    Worth nothing to me. Nothing. It's impossible.
    Chaotic thoughts. Again. They spin so quickly.
    Maybe.
    Such a powerful word. The hope. The loss. The loss of control of the mind.
    A change. An explosion. Destroying, but creating anew?
    Is this the end of an age, or the beginning of a new era?




    Submitted on 2009-07-20 02:54:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow... sounds like my head when i'm lying down trying to sleep but usually can't like now. lol anyway this is an amazing write you've got here. Its style its simliar to mine. being choppy stating facts then going on to the next very direct no beating around the bush... I love it

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-26 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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