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    dots Submission Name: a thatching of barnaclesdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsa thatching of barnaclesdots

    the ears love the spring
    while the tongue craves the summer.
    i want you to know
    that my mouth
    is missing,
    my hands
    are subject
    to earthquakes
    & that my blood
    is sick and confused
    without you.

    the heart
    has a mind
    of it's own,
    relaxed in shades of autumn,
    bathed in the milk
    of the distant dreaming moon.
    with two hearts
    i gather cutouts
    of thunder-fold
    into myself
    to give you.

    the hours
    deplete me
    of irony
    & ivory.
    my skin barely moves,
    a thatching of barnacles,
    sea moss
    & a thousand varieties
    of pelagic entrapment
    to keep me here.

    & this island
    is subject
    to seasonal haunting.
    like the wayward sparrow
    whose blood
    contains the metal
    that sends her south,
    i feel this cool wind tugging
    & the air popping
    all electrical through my secret flesh.

    i wish to part my lips
    & speak a flame into the world,
    to bleed love
    through the walls,
    & the grass
    & the trees that forgave me.
    until then,
    though i may turn laughter
    into the science of healing,
    know that your body
    reminds me of everything
    in my life..

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      This is the first poem of yours that I have read. I logged in and saw that you were Stalking me and decided to see what odd person would do such a thing. Your writing in this piece reminds me of my own, whether by coincidence, influence, or similar perceptions. I don't often comment, both for lack of being moved by what I read and because I don't feel qualified to critique someone else's art.

    I enjoyed this poem more than any that I have read for some time now. You create an intriguing world of vivid images and textures which you use to communicate emotions and relationships. Everything is not clear to the reader, yet emotions and relationships (whether romantic, physical, both, neither, existential) are by nature unclear. What you communicate most effectively is the depth of yourself and your experience, and you do it in an entertaining and thought provoking manner.

    Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2009-11-21 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]

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