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    dots Submission Name: Poems or proses, Lines mine !!dots

    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPoems or proses, Lines mine !!dots

    Let me pluck the rose for you, Red or white - Red it is
    If it were you the petals would be rosier than ever, Sad or Mad without you
    Come rain or come shine I'll be there for you, Cold or Warm - warm with you
    Your silence is killing me, Awake or Slept - Lost without you

    It all started when I saw her , Day or Night - All about you
    Fumbling mumbling I would say, Tea or Coffee - Anything with you
    Walking and talking I would go astray, Black or White - Colored with you
    Took a turn and proposed you, Dream or Reality - Love it is

    Eyes were diamonds lips were petals, Diamonds or Rubies - you are forever
    Nothing like hanging from dusk till dawn, Dusk or Dawn - the Moon is you
    Looking at you was the best thing, Smiles or Frowns - nothing without you
    I kissed, she smiled, I died, Kisses or Roses - a dream till eternity

    Words once poetry are abstract, Poems or Abstracts - Silence without you
    Roses red are now blue, Guns or Roses - November without you
    Drunk I am with your memories, Dead or Alive - Miserable without you
    Hopeless I am with wounds evergreen, Heart or Soul - Everything was you

    Liquor, Nicotine and Caffeine, Friends or Foes still mine
    Came rain came shine, Rain or Shine seasons mine
    Last Christmas I lost, Snow or Sun heart's mine
    With sparkles and smiles came Jane, Roses red again

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    ||| Comments |||
      this is great.

    it jumps around a lot and makes about a million images run through your brain,

    but its not clique,

    just well done.
    | Posted on 2009-10-21 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]

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