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    dots Submission Name: realizing truthsdots

    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsrealizing truthsdots

    its easy to forget
    when you have a regret
    its easy to misjudge
    when you carry a grude

    harder to get over being upset
    when you feel like your love has always been neglect
    its challenging to revive
    when you feel your whole life you been deprived

    its simple to let go
    when the answer has always been no
    confusing no doubt
    but realizing thats what life is all about
    you being to understand theres no reason to pout

    trying so hard just to be heard
    you start to think all your words are obsurd
    but in the end sooner or later everyone gets what they deserve
    so stand up and make yourself heard

    Submitted on 2009-07-20 21:45:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The rhyme scheme in this one is well-done, with the occasional simple rhyme and some more complex ones. However, you should really go over the piece before submitting it, because there are a few grammar errors, such as "grude" instead of "grudge" and "obsurd" instead of "absurd". Even though it's nit-picky, it takes away from the piece.

    I enjoyed the message behind the poem. It's very true you should have a voice and make it heard, despite oppression or depression. If you don't, the world will take you.

    Simple, but good. Keep it up.

    | Posted on 2009-07-21 00:00:00 | by SnakeBite7 | [ Reply to This ]

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