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    dots Submission Name: Irreparable dots
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    Author: Lostlover
    ASL Info:    18/male/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 96/99/53
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsIrreparable dots
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    Rain bleated across my window,
    Each droplet a dagger of despair.
    Could there be no more sunshine?
    Just a break in the clouds,
    A small ray of sunlight,
    Would appease this tumultuous feeling
    Buried deep in the core of my humanity.

    Thinking is hard,
    When pain has engulfed your entire soul.
    In every direction I look,
    Despair has entangled me,
    Like a leech it won’t let go.
    It has me by the legs,
    A ball and chain,
    Please, let me go.

    I am torn,
    Tiny pieces of my heart,
    Have scattered each and every way.
    Which way do I go?
    Does it really matter?
    Either direction I choose my heart is still irreparable.




    Submitted on 2009-07-21 16:17:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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