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    dots Submission Name: liesdots
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    Author: ShadowGaze
    Elite Ratio:    0.87 - 27/15/27
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
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    dotsliesdots
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    a total wreck,
    heeps wrong,
    i cant figure out why i did it.
    my mom says you wanted to be cool.
    my dad doesnt know.
    the friend that told me to,
    doesnt give a shit.
    she just knows it can and will hurt me.
    so why did i call her 'the friend'?
    well she isnt my friend so i should put it like this,
    'the bastard that told me to,'
    better, i know.




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