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    dots Submission Name: Egotistdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Had he the resources
    he'd engrave his name
    as plainly as John Hancock
    as big as Russia
    deep into the Earth,
    so he'd not be forgotten,
    and his appellation
    would be visible from the stars.





    Submitted on 2004-07-18 15:51:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ha... brilliant! write his name in the sky with clouds or stars or the sky itself somehow as an ever lasting eternal WORSHIP ME altar... and what is his reason for worship? his god like quality? simply that he lived... how very blessed you should feel for even the priveledge of knowing he EXISTS let alone KNOWING him in person... awesome write!
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I wanted to do this, but could not find a chissel big enough to do the job, and then I realised that no-one would see it since the Guinness book refused to hire a space shuttle to take a photograph of my work of art. So I scratched it on my old school desk instead. I'm just so flattered that you noticed.
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      it made me think of myself and how i want want want to be the best abd noted and seen and heard, it think it can be a bad thing as i get lost in my own self worth and who knows exept God what his divine plan for me really is...thank you for the insight of your poetry, i hope to have mine make as much sense oneday!
    just fix the typo in the second line please...a great piece
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      a lot of people want to be famous and known and do a lot for it (just watched 'I want a famous face' on MTV - oh my god). I want to be remembered too. but just for who I am and that I'm a nice person (hopefully I am ). your images are vivid and the title fits perfectly. very well done.
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is describing an egotist. This is short, simple and it describes the person's desire to be known in a very crude and unoriginal fashion.
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      Now that is a big ego... I love how you described this. He not only wants to shout out his name to the rooftops, he wants to be known throughout the universe. Geez, I hate guys like this. And yes, If they had the resources, they would do this and MORE.
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      that's funny! i know people like this, and what as.sholes they usually are. however, they usually really have very low self-esteem, though they have to shout themselves big! great job on this, amy!
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      so biased, but being from boston.. i loved the john hancock line. i am a great admirer of short and to the point poems, and this packs more punch than a roy jones jab. Hey Lora, I swear there's an I in team somewhere!

    signed,
    aries.
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by murf | [ Reply to This ]


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