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    dots Submission Name: Structuralism Acivity Onedots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStructuralism Acivity Onedots

    black, shadow
    lines: thick
    horizon angle corner

    white, light
    lines: thick
    numb numbing
    infinity dimensionally
    life action boundless

    Submitted on 2009-07-21 19:20:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reminds me a bit of william carlos williams....

    he had a knack for structuring poems....for placing them on a page a certain way for effect...like his "red wheelbarrow" where each stanza was in the shape of both a wheelbarrow and a chicken's beak.

    i like the poem...it took me to a different dimension...where i was trying to find "the second.

    did you mean for perspeactive to have the "a" in it?

    i like the "thick lines" maybe of poetry, thick with dimension...can be read many different ways top to bottom and vice versa..their is no ceiling that contain the words..no floor that can hold them

    and in shadows or light meaning crops to the surface.

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