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    dots Submission Name: Structuralism Acivity Onedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStructuralism Acivity Onedots
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    black, shadow
    lines: thick
    horizon angle corner
    third
    person------------perspeactive
    top-----ceiling
    bottom----floor

    white, light
    lines: thick
    numb numbing
    infinity dimensionally
    first
    fourth
    fifth
    life action boundless




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      reminds me a bit of william carlos williams....

    he had a knack for structuring poems....for placing them on a page a certain way for effect...like his "red wheelbarrow" where each stanza was in the shape of both a wheelbarrow and a chicken's beak.

    i like the poem...it took me to a different dimension...where i was trying to find "the second.

    did you mean for perspeactive to have the "a" in it?

    i like the "thick lines" maybe of poetry, thick with dimension...can be read many different ways top to bottom and vice versa..their is no ceiling that contain the words..no floor that can hold them

    and in shadows or light meaning crops to the surface.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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