that was sweet even though a little cheesy the meaning was all that mattered in this case so i thank you for your bravery in posting this one even if it never gets to the hall of fame it still made my heart warm!
I love this. Absolutely. I mean, teenagers wouldn't usually write things as that. The rhymes, no matter how simple especially in this era, aren't predictable here and flow very well. This poem shows a determined want in just several sentences, and it seems like it has every said. Good write. Take care.
as said before, short sweet and cute. Its not something a teen would normanlly write, its jsut so simple, and yet not so simple, in a simple sort of way. ACK I hate it when I do that. anyway, good job to yourself in the past.
you had it going on even as a young poet, you did! this is cute... floating on the wings of a bee, how cute is that?! i'd like to see what other stuff you've got up your sleeve from your youth. this made me chuckle, and i needed that!