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    dots Submission Name: Alone in the sub's lightdots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 81
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1062



    Description:
       i love my buttercup, written after i fell asleep on the blue line train in downtown LA.


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    dotsAlone in the sub's lightdots
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    i want to hold you forever and tight

    its more than anything, nothing to me has ever felt this right

    my heart seizures at night

    maybe it's a sixth sense, a second sight

    i want to know if you can do it forever, not just believe the fact that you might

    stay here and remove my plight

    be with me forever, take away our fright

    we know this world, it together me and you will fight

    i want us to know each and everything before the flight

    i'll be yours and you'll be mine on that night

    i feel like we make each other's lives ever so bright

    everyday my soul creates another candle to light

    the only way i know how to remember how you make me feel is to write

    as i write, im cold and alone in the sub's light

    i want to be your significant, all together and polite

    let's take each other so we may never again be trite




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