Wow, that was beautiful. The first stanza kind of leads the rest of the poem and keeps it together. The way you phrased it told whats going on with you two, but still fits in with the rest of the poem. The imagery in the poem was really good, i liked it. It's hard to describe an emotion like that, it's so bittersweet. I think you did a very good job on this poem. I couldn't really think of anything that would need correcting.