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    dots Submission Name: Donít Look Behind Youdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDonít Look Behind Youdots
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    Donít Look Behind You


    From swamp I lifted from an arm
    But collapsed to pitiful puddles
    And ground my fist in slush
    As I heard their voice
    Drag at thus
    And make of evil a cunning mist
    Has me bewitched

    Lost for all my wish to do righteousness
    Has led me astray in my ego wish
    And left me bleating and bawling
    Cowering and quivering
    By the ancient grave
    The made in secret

    Chill, black as the imagination can make it
    Seeps through ever pore
    And begins my will to do its will
    And what will there be
    But
    Murder
    Most foul
    Of stained and terrified blood
    For mad men to feast upon

    And still I cannot find my way from
    This spine chilling howl
    And was it me in moonlight
    Drenched in red
    My reflection does not seem similar now
    But my heart races
    And lips drool
    And my throat
    Growls

    Am I cursed

    The hairs on my arm on down my neck
    Stand
    But is it bristle they feel
    For there is a scent of death and raw meat
    In the air







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