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    dots Submission Name: Gods Willdots
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    Author: col13x
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    dotsGods Willdots
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    Gods Will


    Everyone who believes in God

    Denies responsibility for life

    Everyone who believes in God

    Denies creation and the stars

    They are blind to the heavens above us

    Everyone who believes in God

    Relinquishes their faith in love

    And condones unseen fate as an excuse

    Not to act

    Everyone who believes in God

    Denies responsibility

    Denies responsibility

    Denies responsibility

    Everyone who believes in God

    Does not see their children die of starvation

    Everyone who believes in God

    Believes in Heaven

    And so this life ( your only life )

    Can be excused

    For living in sin

    Everyone who believes in God

    Believes in Heaven

    And denies responsibility

    For their fellow man

    For everyone who believes in God

    Its is easy

    This is just Gods will

    That my plate is full

    And yours is

    Empty






    Submitted on 2009-07-22 11:45:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i like this post I feel you speak the truth, and for those who do not believe or are unsure with what they believe. These people automatically believe when they are dying, on their death bed asking for forgiveness asking for mercy hoping to see heavens gates rather than satin's chambers. This I hate, for people to live life one way (same as they always have) and then change knowing they are dying it disgusts me... Great post

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-24 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm. No if someone truly believes in God, and does everything they can and are supposed to, they empty their plates for the others. They aren't supposed to live their only life in sin or they don't get into heaven. But this poem is good for the "supposed" believers, who say they believe but are just trying to get the benefits.
    But it is well written.
    | Posted on 2009-07-22 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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