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    dots Submission Name: Peek Freans Fig Rolldots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsPeek Freans Fig Rolldots

    Peek Freans Fig Roll

    You make me laugh

    You think that the evil humanity does

    Has nothing to do with you

    And your excuses

    And your prayers

    For salvation

    Merely continue the blindness

    Of your refusal

    To take responsibility

    For the actions of your world

    You have a comfortable retreat

    In the bible

    And comfort in believing

    In a saviour

    And you refuse to see

    That the saving of your neighbour

    Is up to you

    You make me laugh

    With your bible quoted platitudes

    With your simple minded


    To take control of your conscience

    Your fig leaf

    And your Peek Freans fig roll of sweetness


    And wrapped in so much easy buy

    To fit your mouths desire for something sweet

    You cannot connect

    You are as empty as all those possessions

    You place so much esteem upon

    You are the worst case of human evolvement

    And evolutions greatest impediment

    You are slaves

    Slaves to religion

    And slaves to God

    Sightless in your slavery

    And slaves to a system

    Of capitalism

    You are a poor excuse

    For the rationalism and rebellion

    That was once

    Your ancestors right

    And their history

    You are all

    Nothing but


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      I agree with previous commenter. Well written.
    We have similar outlook on the world but you are too harsh on religion. Jesus (or the idea if you don't believe he lived) was a rebel. From the ideas came a new way of thinking that helped free people from the real slavery of those times. Without those ideas, we would not have the freedom we have now. The ideas were indeed powerful and were used by the unscrupulous to exploit others even until now. The road of Marxism/Socialism is just as bad as the things you point out and it has more than its share of slavish believers to the point of failing to understand that there is something beyond people and their demands. The ideas of Socialism are indeed powerful but they too are used to exploit people. Don't trust in leaders - they will use you. Animal Farm is well worth reading. The pigs always rise to the top. Better to be a lover and poet and a seeker of truth.
    | Posted on 2009-07-23 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Peek Freans fig roll
    what is that?
    I don't like it but I admit that it is very well written. I would only change the double spacing. It makes it harder to read.
    I won't really comment on the subject matter cause, like I said, I don't like it, but it is a well written piece, gj.
    | Posted on 2009-07-23 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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