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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Uncharted Depths



    Red rimmed stinging eyes
    Compromise this world
    All that was
    And never dreamed of
    In everything I think
    All I see and do
    Revolves around her
    And I live each day
    Without her

    Mine own love
    Has become a torment
    Hung in these eyes
    Which can only see her

    I cannot count the seconds
    But an eternity
    Without her

    This lowest ebb
    Of solitude
    Still hasnít hit me yet






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