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    dots Submission Name: Fated to Lovedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 310
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsFated to Lovedots

    Fated to Love

    Best to simply weigh the heart with a poppy seed
    Counter balance on granite
    All its rhythmical surging
    Its expeditious life
    Amounts to nothing

    Better then, not to believe in its enchantment
    For it is fated to love
    And do little else but lead
    To ruin

    Well-worn to stop up your ears
    Lest you hear its background murmurings
    Brooding upon devotion
    Lacking the power to change anything
    But weeps constantly for dreams

    Do not then, be deceived
    For all the hearts will to achieve
    It cannot
    But burst inside your veins
    Only half remembering what once you never held
    Though its truth persists
    It lays persecutory back against a lie
    The heart would try
    But cannot defy the world

    Beware then my friends
    For that muscular aorta pump and valve
    Will lay you stark
    And rend open beneath your ribs
    And grant you no solace
    Or escape

    For all in the life of steady beats
    It knows nothing of fact
    And through your nights survival
    Will stab at you with yearning
    Brooking no compromise
    It shall continue

    Damnable heart I say
    To leave me no place to rest
    If I could but tear it out

    For it taints my eyes with longing
    Converting my hours for its keeping
    Playing poker faced with deliverance
    Trying to cheat destiny
    With the price it paid to see me

    Counting the cost in when’s
    And when
    When all the loneliness
    Will end

    Beware of when; then my friends
    For that muscular ventricle pump and valve
    Will lay you star-dream-gathering
    And break open daily beneath your ribs
    And yield to you no solace
    But only escapism

    Damnable heart I say
    To leave me no place to rest
    If I could but tear it out

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