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    dots Submission Name: Our lives will no longer mystiquedots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1666



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    dotsOur lives will no longer mystiquedots
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    i want to die in my sleep, i dont know why i think

    that will be the solution to the way i think

    the more and more i do, the further i sink

    it's not like society needs me for that link

    im in the wrong place at the wrong time, a freak

    some action must hold the answer i seek

    each and every day at the answer i get a peek

    every day life becomes more tongue-in-cheek

    because everyone knows this earthly misery is fucking bleak

    it's like a god damn tradgedy, all written in greek

    everyone's answer to existence is wholefully weak

    should i praise a god i don't remember how bad it was last week?

    how ever we came upon this conscious existence, the process needs a tweak

    all these thoughts, all at once form an almost symphonic shrill shriek

    my want to carry on this horrid scary worthless sentience has reached it's peak

    is there nothing to make it worthwhile, a love, a belief, a desire, a drink?

    if only there was another mind as wonderous as mine to share this mind technique

    maybe together we'll grow old as old as the oldest of antiques

    by that time we'll have new and intelligent answers for life's critique

    oh yes and with these answers, our lives will no longer mystique

    everyone will wonder why we're so happy, curiousity we'll pique

    the best chance at a happy life we shall together, forever wreak




    Submitted on 2009-07-23 04:39:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this writing it amazeing i think its written perfectly!
    | Posted on 2009-07-31 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]


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