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    dots Submission Name: Peace time fantasy (waiting 4 the wars end) dots

    Author: SpoonieD
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       Very...very teen...more teen than if Rage against the machine, living End and Linkin Park all wtrote a song telling adults of the world to "Fuck off, Im young"

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    dotsPeace time fantasy (waiting 4 the wars end) dots

    At 14 every illusion he had and that kept him safe was taken from him.
    Unbeknown to them....it was the first of the last straw.
    Unbeknown to them it was an act of war.
    Took two years nursing his own wounds.
    To realise that strengh in numbers was only mass hysteria
    One advantage to him, he had no ground for them to take.....
    They had taken it all in the first unprovoked attack...
    Leaving only victory as an option.
    An a-massed attack, not so co-ordinated their mistake was not consolidating thier approach.
    But still he would maintain a vow of mercy.... nobody should die for an ideal...that was for him in protection of his beliefs.
    He knew what he was fighting for, orders his own.
    In an army of one you loose no commrades, always on your own.
    In this fatalitiless war thier would be only one. One life lost to stop a war.
    All they had to do was stop throwing stones....
    All he had to do was conceed defeat.......
    So the war continues today, neither side showing any sympathy, one thinking "my" the other wondering "why"?
    5 times he tried to end the war.... but still couldnt die.

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